Would you read something like this?

I don't know about that Chae. Like I mean, with me anyway, I know the rules of writing but that doesn't mean I follow them to a tee. Meaning I don't have them down pat yet. So just because a person can explain what someone should do doesn't mean their writing is a reflection of their "writing" aptitude. Anyway, to answer your question, this wasn't bad. It didn't pull me in at all though but that could be that I am just not interested in this kind of story. No biggie though:) I'm only ONE person. Not everyone will like your work you know:) So keep writing and reading:)